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have formulated a draft of my Personal Statement which I have attached herewith. I have mentioned a few comments that I need help with. Also, I want the entire personal statement to be formatted in a chronological manner, along with filling in the gaps in my current draft of Personal Statement. Further, for your understanding I am attaching my CV as well, which would help you understand my background and assist in making my Personal Statement stronger.

As you will learn from my CV that I am a graduate in Psychology and LLB (Law) is my 2nd bachelor degree, I require my 2 degrees and several internships to be the major focus of my Personal Statement and used as a selling point.
Further, on the basis of that I also need to mention why I would like to do masters in the Intellectual Property in the US at xxx University.

am applying to US Universities for LLM in Intellectual Property. Since, my academic grades are not good enough I need to be able to produce a very strong Personal Statement in order to make my application stronger.

Above mentioned are my requirement for the Personal Statement.

Paper details:

have formulated a draft of my Personal Statement which I have attached herewith. I have mentioned a few comments that I need help with. Also, I want the entire personal statement to be formatted in a chronological manner, along with filling in the gaps in my current draft of Personal Statement. Further, for your understanding I am attaching my CV as well, which would help you understand my background and assist in making my Personal Statement stronger.

As you will learn from my CV that I am a graduate in Psychology and LLB (Law) is my 2nd bachelor degree, I require my 2 degrees and several internships to be the major focus of my Personal Statement and used as a selling point.
Further, on the basis of that I also need to mention why I would like to do masters in the Intellectual Property in the US at xxx University.

am applying to US Universities for LLM in Intellectual Property. Since, my academic grades are not good enough I need to be able to produce a very strong Personal Statement in order to make my application stronger.

Above mentioned are my requirement for the Personal Statement.