When discussing the elements of negligence, expand a bit more about what you mean by ascertaining the injury and the nature of the breach and the cause of damages. Who are those elements apportioned to and how do you make that connection?
Same with contributory negligence, you should discuss how the plaintiff would share the blame. It should go beyond just simply being parties to the incident or breach. You should talk about what makes the Plaintiff share the blame.
For Sally, expand more on the basis of negligence. Include a discussion on the elements of negligence and how that relates to the Defendant’s actions or lack of action.
For possible defenses, name them and explain what they are and what facts in the scenario make those defenses apply.
For Green Acres, name the type of liability and how it might apply so you have to discuss the elements of it.
Finally watch for spelling and grammar.