Hey Joyce, Khristelle and I were reading your paragraph and there were just some stuff that needed tweaking. We highlighted some parts because they sound like you are justifying colonialism and some of them sound like you’re speculating because there are no sources backing it up. Also, you are focusing too much on Saskatchewan but the point of our paper is the disparity within the entire Aboriginal community in comparison to the rest of the Canadian population in general using Saskatchewan as a case study… If you could revise it that’d be great! Thanks

Khristelle
Also, I don’t really see any mention of the residential school system and the sixties scoop or just in general the specific circumstances that they have experienced here in Canada, so if you could put that in that would be awesome