Hi, I have written most of it, but it is very messy and would appreciate editing to restructure the content into an answer that is coherent and does not have to be complicated.

Pointers:
1) Tell me what you think of the current work so far
2) Inform me of what it is lacking, what it needs, etc.
3) How you plan to fix this (with citations, and a bibliography)

The conclusion I would like to do myself.
Thanks for your time