This is an analysis of persona based on an essay ”Joy”. I wrote already and my professor gave me feedback. I need you to revise it based on the feedback of my professor. I hope you can read the essay ” Joy” very specifically in order to have more understanding of the essay. Otherwise, it is hard to write a good analytical essay.

These are the things that needed to revise:
1. The thesis statement -just revise it a little bit better
2. The quotes that choose from the essay ”Joy”- need to add quotes which are related to the writer’s persona in the essay ”Joy”
3. Body paragragh: There are three body paragraphs and each paragraph should be well-organized. The pattern is: topic sentence>quote>explain the quote but not summarize it
4. Conclusion: add more critical thinking and how you feel about the language in the essay
5. For the counter argument paragraph, the words should be cut since there are too many words.
6. Grammar: please check the grammar and the sentence structure.
7. add one more paragraph of support, and one more quote within that paragraph–at least 150 words.

The attachments are the essay ”Joy” which I need to analysis the persona and another attachment is my analysis essay that I need you to revise it.

This is an analysis of persona based on an essay ”Joy”. I wrote already and my professor gave me feedback. I need you to revise it based on the feedback of my professor. I hope you can read the essay ” Joy” very specifically in order to have more understanding of the essay. Otherwise, it is hard to write a good analytical essay.

These are the things that needed to revise:
1. The thesis statement -just revise it a little bit better
2. The quotes that choose from the essay ”Joy”- need to add quotes which are related to the writer’s persona in the essay ”Joy”
3. Body paragragh: There are three body paragraphs and each paragraph should be well-organized. The pattern is: topic sentence>quote>explain the quote but not summarize it
4. Conclusion: add more critical thinking and how you feel about the language in the essay
5. For the counter argument paragraph, the words should be cut since there are too many words.
6. Grammar: please check the grammar and the sentence structure.
7. add one more paragraph of support, and one more quote within that paragraph–at least 150 words.

The attachments are the essay ”Joy” which I need to analysis the persona and another attachment is my analysis essay that I need you to revise it.